UPDATE: Most recent revision (9/1) in #25. Critique for critique. Thanks :)
UPDATE: I've rewritten my query and would love for you to take a look at it (Post #14). Critique for critique. Thanks!!
UPDATE: Working on a rewrite based on the critique I received. I'll post what I have, when I have it :)
I'd love some honest feedback on my query in return for some honest feedback on yours!
Lewis Left was ready for her purpose. She steeled her nerves for the ‘squelch’ sound the ring would make as it passed through her neck. She stocked up on cream for the inevitable chafing. She dreamed of how her purpose would change the world. What Lewis wasn’t prepared for was a King who dared think her purpose was his to take. When Lewis finds herself in a battle for control over her own purpose, she must outwit the King if she wants to determine for herself, and herself alone, how she will change the world.
A warning: This story does not end with the hero merely finding her purpose. This tale is not about the chosen one being forced to take her purpose. There is no girl running away from her purpose here.
THIS IS NOT A CROWN is about a girl fighting tooth and nail, clawing and screaming, getting knocked down and standing up again, doing anything and everything to take back her own purpose.