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SYNOPSIS OF MAX VISION 15-year-old MAX JACOB’s father dies and his mother loses her business, leading their family to move to a broken-down trailer park in Florida. Max adjusts to the town, while dealing with his mother working a low-income job and her new boyfriend who bullies him. Upon visiting an abandoned house in the woods, he takes an object and a voice begins speaking in his mind that revenge is good for the boyfriend. Max is a timid kid, who would not commit vengeance on a flower. On the first day of tenth grade, Max has an accident in his pants. The mysterious voice influences him that the incident was the teacher’s fault. As tenth grade continues, Max obsesses over a gorgeous girl named ISABELLA. She befriends him (but only to make GINO, her hoodlum boyfriend, jealous). When he discovers that his girlfriend has been spending time with the laughing stock of the school, Gino is furious. He drags Max out of the gym shower and dumps him naked into a crowded school hallway. The voice grows louder in Max’s mind, urging him to use the object to take revenge. Still, violence is not an option for Max. He talks with a school counselor, but finds her answers do not solve his problems. While visiting a local hardware store, he runs into CHIP, a cryptic figure, who seems to be assisting him behind the scenes. After the third day of school, Max discovers his mother’s boyfriend sitting in his bedroom, while his dead rabbit swings from a shoe string. He grabs his dead rabbit and cradles him in tears. Max decides to put on the mysterious object for protection. The object is revealed to be the voice’s dress, who is Dartha, a malevolent spirit. She once suffered abuse from a sadistic husband when she lived in the abandoned house. When Max wears the dress, he becomes his alter ego, MAXI, a vigilante who exacts vengeance on the abusive men in his own life. Max steals the boyfriend’s truck at nightfall—the school bully, the boyfriend, and the teacher soon all find themselves imprisoned in Dartha’s house. As Maxi analyzes his captured subjects, the detectives open an investigation. Surprising Maxi at the abandoned house, Max’s one true friend is horrified to meet Maxi, along with the captives. She argues with her friend that Dartha is a demonic entity who must be destroyed. Maxi, momentarily convinced, torches the object of his possession, the evil dress. After the dress is destroyed, the boyfriend manages to stab Max, and severely injures Chip, who came to the abandoned house to help Max. Only Max’s best friend manages to stab the murderous boyfriend in self-defense and save his friend. Weeks later in the hospital, his best friend explains that the hoodlum Gino did not snitch on him for kidnapping because it goes against his street code. The teacher did not say a word because he understood it was a possession. Meanwhile, the ex-boyfriend runs his mouth about suing Max’s mother for her son’s role in the kidnapping. Yet criminal charges lead his voice to fall on dead ears. The FBI takes over the investigation. In the hospital, Max and Chip are recovering from the incident at the abandoned house, and Max notices his mother seems happy. The boyfriend is out of her life and she found a good paying job. Max is happy that he no longer has to live with a bully, and he believes that after everything, the school bully and the teacher will bother him no more. He goes into the hospital bathroom, feeling liberated, as he looks in the mirror. Then he hears her voice. It’s quite the same, just as kind, just as sweet; only it reminds him that Dartha had never existed.