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#21 BoJo Johnson

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Posted 17 August 2017 - 07:21 PM

Mutt/ Annabel/ Lakiya is half human, half Were-Human, when she goes to learn about her human half she finds love, and a Were-Wolf stalker who threatens the lives of everyone she cares about, now she has to fight if she wants to save herself and them.



#22 Niambi

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Posted 18 August 2017 - 01:35 PM

YES!

 

That has all the "stuff" you need.  

 

Over time, while you're working on your query, you will fine-tune it and surprise yourself but what you have here is a great start.



#23 punitrastogi

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Posted 22 August 2017 - 05:09 AM

Mutt/ Annabel/ Lakiya is half human, half Were-Human. When she goes to learn about her human half she finds love, and a Were-Wolf stalker who threatens the lives of everyone she cares about, now she has to fight if she wants to save herself and them.

 

That is all that you need.

 

The part I have cut can be used to end your query, but the rest of it is sufficient in itself.

 

Good job.






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