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YA Contemp/Magical Realism THE SYMPTOMS OF DYING


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#1 anathebookworm

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Posted 16 August 2017 - 05:08 PM

Hi! Soo, I have two hooks I want to use next DVpit...not sure if they're good enough, though. What do you guys think?

 

Also, if you want me to critique your hook as well, just post the link here! :)

 

Thanks! <3

 

1- Liv is a comatose 17yo with no hope of recover. When she hears her cousin's suicidal thoughts, she needs to wake up and save him

2- EVERYTHING EVERYTHING + 13 REASONS WHY: after learning about her cousin's suicidal plans, Liv needs to wake up from her coma



#2 C. C. Carroll

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Posted 16 August 2017 - 05:19 PM

Seventeen-year-old Liv lies in a coma and can hear the suicidal thoughts of her cousin. They say it can't happen, but she needs to wake up! She has to save him!

 

 

I'm REALLY new to this, Bookworm.

Hope this helps.

Sounds cool! 



#3 BoJo Johnson

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Posted 16 August 2017 - 07:51 PM

I like C.C Caroll's version. Puts more urgency on the waking up part.






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