Here are the first 250 words of my first chapter. This is sort of a introduction, this happens about a year before the main character gets drawn in the story.
What I want to know is if it makes you curious and if you want to read further and why you want to read further, or not.
Many thanks in advance. If you have a part of your story you want me to criticise in return let me know!
The arival of darkness
Darkness, it was darkness he felt. He had felt darkness before, but this, this was real darkness.
A fear started flowing through him, had it been unwise of him to investigate on his own?
Would he dare to enter? To push himself further into this darkness?
He had to know, he had to see.
The bridge doomed up in front of him. The stones were time-worn by the thousands of years it had battled against the elements.
on the sides stood dark looking statues of forgotten people of before the first era.
It had as much walking space as it had black holes, revealing a deep endless fall to the black bottom of a ravine, filled with sharp rocks.
The bridge looked dangerous, not only for the danger of falling to death but also for it being capable to bring you to the other side, a place one should not venture.
On the other side of the bridge stood a castle, huge with many towers and peaks, broken walls and dark windows.
It was a place of death and darkness, for he did not know the history of it but he felt it. This place had known nothing but hate, pain and sorrow.
It contained a darkness so deep no one had set foot in it after the first era had started.
This castle was from the dark times. And he could feel it, it contained power, power that shouldn't have been here.