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#1 Holly Poe

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Posted 31 August 2017 - 10:28 AM

6th grade outcast, Felicia, solves mystery of Titanic artifact with help of ghost that haunts it and her first real (live) friend



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Posted 31 August 2017 - 02:35 PM

I think this gives away the ending of your story. Maybe something like, "12-year-old Felicia teams up with a ghost inside a doll to search for her sister, last seen fleeing the Titanic."


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Posted 13 September 2017 - 12:42 PM

I agree with Ireth, giving away a little less leaves the reader wanting more. I also appreciate her addition of articles (the, and, a, etc.). Sounds like a fun book!






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