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Woman confronts boss... is this too violent?


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#1 Pen

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Posted 03 September 2017 - 08:06 AM

I have a sci fi story that is centered around a couple. The wife learns that her image was used to make a holographic sex toy for her boss and she confronts him.

 

By confront I mean she smashes his face on his desk several times, beats him with her fists, kicks him, whacks him in the balls three times with a 9 iron, takes a very cheap whiskey and pours it on his testicles, drops a lighter over said spot, and then breaks a knock-off art piece across his face.

 

She leaves with an a extremely expensive bottle of scotch that a client gave them as token of appreciation.

 

I'm wondering if the above would be too violent for a sci fi magazine.

 

Thank you for your input.

 



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Posted 15 September 2017 - 05:41 PM

I have no idea about sci fi magazines or what's appropriate in them... but that sounds like an intense scene. I'd love to read it sometime. 



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Posted 16 September 2017 - 06:16 PM

I have a draft of it.

 

I was thinking about, to improve the flow of the story, to basically have her summarize what she did.






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