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Raff lost everything- love, liberty and family, and now, freshly released, he wants it back but doesn’t know how. When an Arctic motoring adventure is offered in the country of his childhood, he leaps at the chance of a fresh start.
After settling on the old family estate, he finds hidden war time documents that indicate his antecedents hid caches of weapons and possibly a fortune in gold up country. Cache coordinates in the GPS, he takes his friends on a ‘treasure’ hunt on the way to the arctic in blizzard conditions-but it takes a horrifying turn when the old sites turn out to be Russian Mafia storage depots and the Russians, fearing a rival takeover do everything they can to stop the ‘rivals’ from getting to their Arctic destination.
After the first series of violent clashes that they barely escape, their communications are destroyed and the chase is on, forcing Raff to desperately send a last garbled message for help, accidentally sending it to his son Sean and former love, Holly.
Unbeknownst to him, the estranged Sean-himself fighting for direction and independence; his distraught and angry younger sister, Nicole and Holly- ALL- independently of each other-and for their own reasons-then decide to find Raff, and with a little detective work, seek to ‘intercept’ him at his Arctic destination.
Unfortunately for them, Holly’s rich sociopath husband enlists mercenaries to help track her down on the way, and after a Hotel bloodbath, the Russian mafia who mistakenly now have ‘proof’ of a takeover, pull out all stops in chasing them down, forcing Raff’s reunited but stunned and confused family and friends to desperately go cross country where together they’ll have to use all their guile and ingenuity if they’re going to survive the trek to safety and avoid the murderous hunters..
‘Frozen Gold’ is 104,000 words and combines the best of Cussler’s great action and deliciously implausible ’treasures’ with some of Clancy’s attention to detail and Grisham’s pace. The blurb I’d like to see, would read-
“Raff has Bond’s dry wit…without the panache; the effectiveness of Bourne…without the skill: He finds trouble as easily as Indy, but with the tenacity of Cluseau and Chaplin’s heart, he always makes it”
‘He’ is continuing his adventures in ‘Frozen Diamonds’ which is taking shape well.
A winner of prizes in a poetry and short story competition, I am bursting at the seams with ideas and am hoping this tickles your fancy enough to consider representing me.
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