I've started working on my new young adult novel. I really wonder if the opening lines are engaging.
Here it is...
Luka had been hiding behind a huge stalactite for, he looked at his phone, about two hours and a half. He was now squatting next to a mineral-built statue that looked fairly like David Jones’s tentacles from the Pirates of the Caribbean. And the moisty gloss over the statue made the resemblances even more vivid. Whenever he touched them, he drew away shivering disgusted.
In general, every stalactite and stalagmite resembled something else down here, in the cave, especially under the meek, mysterious lights that shifted from one rainbow color to another. For example, a face of hornless Hellboy, flushing red with light, was staring from opposite. A beardy dwarf-face was looking over from next to him.
At the sound of two couples of feet, he shrank into his hiding place so that his left arm pressed against the tentacles. This time, it didn’t bother him. The local ranger with a guide, a rather stout girl with wavy dark fair hair carelessly stacked up over her head, were pacing quickly. It was the same guide that had welcomed him a couple of hours ago with a standard phrase, ‘You are about to enter the Prometheus Cave. The humidity in the cave is 85% and the temperature 14 degrees Celsius all year round.’
They passed chatting by the stalactite he was hiding behind. It was the final check before the cave was closed for the night. Luka still had time to reveal his whereabouts and cry for help. He didn’t though.