Since running away from home a year ago, Feidhelm More has burned—literally. He performs “magic” shows using his supernatural powers over fire (to earn money) and pretends not to give a damn about his alienation from his family (to stay sane).
Businessman John Kostelecky is the first to see through the deception. He appears at a show armed with the whereabouts of Feidhelm’s estranged father and a name for his talents: Pyrokinesis, an ability linked to
the Kinetics, an elite group of people who can control natural aspects of the world: the Kinetics. Kostelecky proposes a business deal: retrieve the Verity Archive, a book he can use to stop a shadow eater from destroying the world, and he’ll introduce Feidhelm to his father. Why does Feidhelm want to meet his father? Make this last line here more dramatic - maybe switch up the delivery. "He'll introduce Feildhem is his estranges father, if he does something for him - retrieve the Verity Archive.
What is the Verity Archive? A legend? Something he's heard about before? Is is dreaded? Mysterious? Feared? Is it his world's equivalent of the holy grail?
To retrieve the Verity Archive, which is located at the end of the universe, and receive the information he needs, Feidhelm teams up with a dreamer who can’t move past a graveyard, a 1960’s schoolgirl with synesthesia, and a boxer who fights to defend her secrets—all of whom are also Kinetics. There is a lot going on in this sentence, structurally speaking. Trim it into two neater ones to ease the clutter. In the end of the universe, they face Defenders hell-bent on keeping the book where it is and the Contagion, a disease to which they’re supposedly immune.
As it becomes apparent Kostelecky kept one big secret for himself, Feidhelm tries to forget one thing:
Verity can be more dangerous than any lie. What lie? I feel like this is supposed to be dramatic, but it doesn't pack that dramatic punch that it should.
VERITY, a YA urban fantasy complete at 98,000 words, is told from four different points of view. It will appeal to those who enjoyed the fast-paced heist in Leigh Bardugo’s Six of Crows and the large cast of characters in Marissa Meyer’s The Lunar Chronicles.
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