Hey everyone. I haven't been on here in years, since I finished my first novel. I've been having some trouble getting any interest in my newest book, and I'm not sure if its because the content is cliche (angels) or if the writing is not good enough. I will gladly return any critiques I receive. Thanks for your time.
My novel, INHERITOR OF THE ETERNAL FLAME, is the standalone story of a withered god, a slain savior, and betrayals between immortal kin. Complete at 91,000 words, INHERITOR OF THE ETERNAL FLAME offers a perspective-driven narrative that borrows names and themes from various religions in order to create a fantasy setting that is familiar yet unique.
In the realm of Eden, the city of Heaven houses the seat of a creator far from almighty. Now the fading embers of a once-omniscient flame, God rules over his vast kingdom through the Choir of Eldar, a council of his oldest and most powerful angels. When a cherub named Mikael is brought before them to confess a sin, he admits to eating from the Tree of Forbidden Knowledge. The Eldar discover that the tree bears the fruits of a vision God buried long ago: he will be murdered by one of his beloved children.
The Choir, led by Lucifer and his wife Athena, focus their efforts on diverting the prophecy and protecting God. Wishing to assess the visions for herself, Athena eats from the Tree of Forbidden Knowledge. Each apple that she consumes drives her closer to a maddening truth: it is Lucifer who is destined to usurp the throne and untie the threads of creation. Determined to save her love from his fate and confident in her own ability to rule, Athena kills her creator, imbibes his power, and declares herself Goddess.
Athena’s actions have far-reaching repercussions. Seen as a harbinger of God’s death, Mikael has his wings ripped from his back and is cast down to the mortal realm. Half of Heaven’s angels abandon the white city to worship an Eldar who vows to avenge the creator. Mountainous stone anubites appear on Earth, enslaving humanity and binding them to Athena’s will. While Mikael guides the hand of a child-messiah, Lucifer struggles to choose between loyalty and love. As war looms over Earth and Eden, the Eldar grow increasingly desperate, but none can defy the law that dictates the cosmic cycle of life itself. There can only be one INHERITOR OF THE ETERNAL FLAME.