Hey, everyone. Time for the next fun project. My synopsis is currently 1200 words (2 pages), so I'm not concerned about length, but that does mean I'm only placing the first portion here. My biggest concern is the start, anyway. I want to make sure that I'm effectively introducing the characters and the world without being confusing of dull. Again, this is only the beginning of my synopsis, not the entire thing. I know it's supposed to encompass the whole story, so please don't tell me this needs to include the ending. I know.
Anyway, any thoughts are appreciated. I'll continue to reciprocate feedback on queries/synopses.
Using great metal nihilships, humanity can traverse the Cipher, the void between the worlds. But only a rare group of people known as nihilempaths have the innate ability to pilot those ships, and most of those nihilempaths are in the employment of the Coalition, the worlds’ controversial unifying body.
As one of the few independent nihilempaths, LARA KAVARIN (POV) instead makes a living scavenging old artifacts across the worlds. Her crew aboard the nihilship Ouroboros is small: Lara’s best friend, MAREI, a loyal cynic with the ability to manipulate darkness; Marei’s twin brother, ROSS, a people-pleaser who can manipulate light; and CENETTI, the staunch medic and Ross’s lover.
Their explorations bring them to ruins in a remote world, where they discover a spike made of nil, the Cipher’s equivalent to matter. Immediately after, they are attacked by voidbanes, monstrous creatures that have escaped from the depths of the Cipher. Using the darkness as a weapon, Marei is able to hold the voidbanes at bay just long enough for the crew to escape, although Lara feels responsible for bringing her friends into the situation, even unwittingly.
Lara pilots them to the populous world of Korrelia, where they can sell off the nil spike. No sooner have they arrived than Lara is rounded up by Coalition officials. They desperately need her help: one of their captains, AMERLAINE SILVER, has gone rogue. She’s taken their most powerful ship, the Empyrean, and slaughtered their nihilempaths, preventing pursuit. Worse, she has somehow procured a device that will allow her to open giant holes to the Cipher in all worlds, which will unleash voidbanes to cause millions of deaths. Reluctantly, Lara agrees to chase down Amerlaine with her crew, realizing that this is far bigger than her fear or her political disagreements with the Coalition. To aid the mission, the Coalition sends EVAINE, a socially uncomfortable specialist, and GIDEON, an inexperienced petty officer.
Based off intel from Evaine, who was previously on Amerlaine’s crew, they set off for Darah, a world inhabited only by a small colony of cultists. Over the several-day journey, Lara and Gideon find themselves bonding, although their political differences about the Coalition leave a barrier between them. Halfway through the journey, Lara notices events repeating themselves and realizes they are caught in a loop—a short section of repeating time, with only nihilempaths remembering previous iterations of the loop. Lara successfully navigates them out to safety.