Feel free to rip this query to shreds. I need help, because I've had over 100 rejections of this story since 2014 with almost zero constructive feedback from a single agent (one agent told me she was hoping it was "more YA.").
Thank you in advance!
A scruffy but brilliant teenage boy hacks an alien security network and steals the LAMP software, sending his life into a tailspin that, after years of hiding, leads him to go against the better judgement of his closest friends and return home to save a girl.
As a streetjacker, teenager Laddin has gotten used to cash payouts from the scummy market business owners that deal him easy network hacks. He works low and lies low, so, when the Earth's Sutlan learns of his talents and demands more than stolen information, Laddin finds himself on a fated quest as he travels off planet to steal the wish-fulfilling Link Access Manipulation Program. When the job drops him in the middle of a catch-22, Laddin's life is quickly reduced to run-or-die as he utilizes the help of his android, Zadè, a spaceship flight attendant named Kimber, and the General Interface Emulator (Gen.I.E.), to help him escape the Sultan and go into hiding … for years.
Engulfed and depressed by his new persona and lifestyle, Laddin suddenly discovers Kimber on the opulent planet where he has chosen to hide out from his past. When Kimber reveals herself as heiress to Earth's fortunes but desperate to leave her father's grasp, Laddin finds himself with a reason to return home, no matter how stupid and dangerous it would be. With the Sultan still looking for him and the LAMP, it isn't long before he, his android, and his personal valet are caught up in a storm of war and rebellion they could never have predicted.
LAMP is a 100,000-word speculative sci-fi novel that does for Aladdin what Cinder by Marissa Meyer does for “Cinderella”, and what Ready Player One by Ernest Cline does for MMO and VR games: it takes the story to a more accessible level for all audiences by placing it into a futuristic, technological dystopia where survival and adventure are the name of the game.
My name is John Sperry. in 2014 my sci-fi short story “Time is Money” was published on DailyScienceFiction.com. I have self-published a trilogy of YA urban fantasy books called Immortal Light, and I was a writer and photographer for a sports website for six years. Thank you for your time.
LAMP is the first in a potential series, and I have included the first few pages in this email for your perusal.