Callie wants to be invisible. And thanks to her subconscious ability to erase memories, she almost is.
Life on the streets is lonely for a seventeen-year-old, but Callie’s learned to appreciate the solitude. The less she’s noticed, the easier survival becomes. However, her social isolation ends when she's approached by a group of strangers who claim there's more to her peculiar life than meets the eye ["than meets the eye" is a bit cliche and doesn't evoke any images]. They say she's a Reaper--a person capable of manipulating focus and memory--and offer to help her reach her full potential.
Under their guidance, Callie progresses from subconsciously making people ignore her, to actively altering memories with a single stare. But her new friends, each with a psychological
specialityspecialty of their own, have trained her for another reason--a rebel crusade against a mysterious empire capable of rescinding their powers [this sentence is a bit long. Consider splitting them up into 2 sentences (with the part about them being able to rescind their powers in the second sentence]. Upon locating the enemy, Callie is shocked to find her own kind--Reapers--along with an offer to join them. The empire is convinced that suppression is the only way to keep the peace, else the rebels will exploit and overthrow the powerless. But Callie's friends are done with being oppressed, and await her intel, ready to initiate their uprising. Obtain
Knowing the plans [stronger word here?] of both sides, Callie's undecided loyalty becomes a catalyst for chaos—joining the empire will mean betraying her only friends, siding with the rebels could massacre her Reaper kin, and retreating to solitude will leave an entire city in the crossfire of an imminent war.
18FORGOTTEN is a YA fantasy complete at 95,000 words. Comps, bio, etc.
I would greatly appreciate any feedback you can provide on my new version of my query for BISECTER