ales of Adventure: The Wayfarer is an adult novel complete at 80,000 words. It is an exploration of the philosophical aspects of psychosis and existentialism in a high fantasy setting.
Aëros can’t recall when the shadow first appeared, or why. It walks alongside him, a doppelgänger wreathed in darkness, evoking unease with its cryptic ravings.
Wary of the shadow, Aëros nevertheless abides it still not a fan of the "abides it" phrase as it guides him towards Athair — the villain responsible for reducing the first what is "the first kingdom"? that doesn't make sense to me kingdom to ash. As he sets Setting out from the verdant hills of the East, Aëros makes his way into the desolate wastes of the West in search of revenge. He tolerates the inconvenience of itinerant comrades, revels with spirited gypsies and forest Druids, and fends off the cursed foes that assail him along his road.
Yet the vexing natures of allies and marauders are the least of Aëros’ concerns. Fragments of memories long repressed surface in his mind’s eye, each drawn out by the shadow’s enigmatic words. The nearer he comes to Athaircomma the more vivid the memories become. As he pieces them together, he finds within within doesn't make sense without a pronoun after a haunting secret — one linked to Athair, the shadow’s origins, and a past he has willfully forgotten.
Thank you for your time and attention.
I like this! I'm not crazy about it, though. Something just doesn't feel right - perhaps the stakes are dwindling again? I'm also not getting the sense of the world that you fit in earlier queries
ales of Adventure: The Wayfarer is an adult novel complete at 80,000 words. It is an exploration of the philosophical aspects of psychosis and existentialism in a high fantasy setting.
Aëros can’t recall when the shadow first appeared, or why. It walks alongside him, a doppelgänger wreathed in darkness, evoking unease with its cryptic ravings.
Wary of the shadow, Aëros nevertheless abides it still not a fan of the "abides it" phrase as it guides him towards Athair — the villain responsible for reducing the first what is "the first kingdom"? that doesn't make sense to me kingdom to ash. As he sets Setting out from the verdant hills of the East, Aëros makes his way into the desolate wastes of the West in search of revenge. He tolerates the inconvenience of itinerant comrades, revels with spirited gypsies and forest Druids, and fends off the cursed foes that assail him along his road.
Yet the vexing natures of allies and marauders are the least of Aëros’ concerns. Fragments of memories long repressed surface in his mind’s eye, each drawn out by the shadow’s enigmatic words. The nearer he comes to Athaircomma the more vivid the memories become. As he pieces them together, he finds within within doesn't make sense without a pronoun after a haunting secret — one linked to Athair, the shadow’s origins, and a past he has willfully forgotten.
Thank you for your time and attention.
I like this! I'm not crazy about it, though. Something just doesn't feel right - perhaps the stakes are dwindling again? I'm also not getting the sense of the world that you fit in earlier queries