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wants can you choose a stronger word than "wants"? This is the opening, the hook. to ruin the life of the man who drove her father to commit suicide. Okay, now that you've whittled it down to the meat I think you might want to put something more about Jameson in here instead of "the man" to bring it to life a bit more.
Off the top of my head:
Seventeen-year-old Amber Blake intends to destroy <First Name> Jameson; a business associate who drove her father to suicide.
Play around with what you have a bit to breathe some more life into your characters.
Seventeen-year-old Amber Blake spends her senior year plotting a scheme to destroy Mr. Jameson. All she needs is to lure Jameson’s son in. Which isn’t hard for the hottest senior in high school.
I don't know. I don't really like the flow of this. Fiddle around the wording a bit to make it sound more exciting. Nothing major, but I think it's missing a little "oomph".
If the previous sentence is your hook, you need to start to reel me in here. The sentences aren't flowing nicely.
for example: The high school senior is confident she can seduce Jameson's son and... (Tease me with her planned revenge here)
she Amber gets invited to a fundraiser hosted by her prime target, Jameson. keep it simple so this is easy to follow. she activates plan one. Amber she starts by planting plants drugs in the library , then sends a tip to the cops. She lingers around for the disaster I think this needs a better word than disaster. to take place, but nothing happens. No handcuffs or news reporters, instead she provokes dirty cops and bitter men. <-- reword that. It's vague and adds nothing.
As she attempts to cover her tracks from that night, a former flame shows up and he’s trouble. Jameson’s arrogant nephew, Johnny. He is still the same handsome mischief-maker from when they were younger.
Johnny is trying to find the person
that who wants to destroy his uncle and wants asks for Amber's help. (and asks Amber for help.)
Although all the clues are pointing towards her, Amber agrees to help.
Amber agrees so she can
She needs to lead him towards in the wrong direction while she covers up her mistakes. (and cover up some mistakes she made?) You never mentioned any mistakes earlier.
As she works with Johnny, she remembers how comforting he
was, is and how he made her feel at ease. or should I say ( As she works with Johnny, she remembers how comforting he was, and how he used to always make her feel right at home. ) Neither of those are really coming across as strong enough emotions for this situation. Make it more dramatic. Comforting? Grandmas are comforting too. Show me her intense attraction and feelings here that are going to throw a wrench in everything she's planned!
She finally feels like a normal teenager when she's around him. Nah. She is a normal teenager. Dig deeper if you want to tell me how he really makes her feel.
But, she can’t fall in love.
She has twice failed to destroy Mr. Jameson, and can’t fail again. I'd reword this part. The tension should be building and building and by now. "Can't fail again" is just sort of boring.
Now Amber faces a tough choice: fall in love with Johnny and threaten her plan blowing in her face, or continue her mission and lose the only chance at a normal life. Play with the wording a bit more here.