Darsanault's hook is really quite good.
This is sounding good. I dig the flip even if the action on the trigger needs oil.
Thank you everyone!
Here's a different, more serious take on the same book:
I am currently seeking representation for my contemporary gay romance, THE GLOW UP, which is complete at 92,000 words. The novel is a first-person, dual-POV standalone in a potential series. The series has room for a wide range of relationships, including lesbian pairings and romantic trios.
I am intrigued.
Will Cunningham grew up in a cramped hovel, where the always-blaring TV blocked out the dysfunction of his histrionic mother. (GREAT WORD) At Renard College, he aims to drown his problems in a sea of happy rich kids. He wants to be the first in his family to earn a degree, make real money, and maybe even work in New York’s Garment District. Unfortunately, his past follows him in a triad of panic attacks, nightmares, and the boy he believes rejected him in high school.
Im agreeing with the notion of needing a great hook.
Cian Zyrnes is not over his first love. Renard College offers him a string of unsatisfying one night stands, but when he stumbles into Will at a campus party, he wants a second chance.
A tad confusing ya dig? I had to cast my glimmers on it twixt to get why Cian, not Will, wants a second chance.
Older now, he realizes that Will isn’t easily hurt so much as already hurting, and a boy like that isn’t ready for a healthy relationship.
You sort of lost me here gator. I think you should hang your wig on the "will they or won't they make it together" tension.
The knots in Will’s stomach need more than love to be untangled. Surrounded by friends, a therapist, and a quirky pastor, Will and Cian don’t know the antidote, but together they’re going to find it.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Mine is called Che Cazzo and I am struggling mightily getting it in shape for the #PitMad after party assuming I get a few looks.