REVAMP #10
Dear [INSERT AGENT NAME HERE],
I noticed on your Publishers Marketplace page that you represent quite a few young adult books with magical elements with diverse characters. Because of this, I am submitting for your consideration The Fyreheart, an 80,000-word YA fantasy that will appeal to fans of A Song of Ice and Fire and The Magicians.
For most girls, the worst thing that can happen in your senior year of high school is getting a pimple before prom. For Rhianaye Humphrey, things are a bit more complicated than that.
After failing to stop the murder of her best friend Sara by a mysterious cult in ritualistic sacrifice, Rhianaye accidentally unleashes her dormant magic by summoning a dragon in her distress—a feat believed to be impossible for mere humans. Needing answers, she’s discovered by a young man named Sigmund Bjørnsson with his eccentric, yet humorous, Familiar in the form of a talking bear; who offers the girl protection in the only place he believes she will be safe: the Avalon University for Advanced Sorcery. To save herself from the Dark Cult and avenge her friend, Rhi accepts.
However, not even Sigmund can keep her safe, as someone is on a murdering spree in her city, and the chaos reveals one thing: The Darkness, a benevolent creature believed to had been locked away thousands of years ago, is scratching against the Veil. Rhi finds herself forced to decide what she desires most: vengeance for her loved ones, or stopping the world from plunging into eternal darkness; even then the cost just might be her humanity.
Below are the 10 pages of the manuscript and my contact information. Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely,
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