Che Cazzo (Adult Fiction)
Posted 13 January 2018 - 01:02 PM
Posted 14 January 2018 - 01:39 PM
I see that you've got goal, motivation & conflict, but I'm just not grabbed. I think it's because I don't understand why his relapse would mean incarceration. I'd also like to know why he's having a hard time accepting the reason for his addiction.
I know that's a lot to include in a hook, but I think it's important to know what Vincenzo's own situation is, as opposed to any generic addict's situation. Make me root for Vincenzo, not just an addict.
Best of luck!
“We must always take sides. Neutrality helps the oppressor, never the victim. Silence encourages the tormentor, never the tormented.” ― Elie Wiesel
Posted 14 January 2018 - 03:16 PM
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