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Hello, community. I'm new here and i was wondering if anyone would like to give me any feedback on my query. I will reciprocate with delight.
Dear (Agent's Name),
I am currently seeking representation for my novel Ripples in the Pond, a suspense-crime story completed at 78. 000 words.
Carrie Ripples tries to juggle her boredom, her friend’s suspicious death, her suspension from the Academy, as well as her dysfunctional relationship with her stoner aunt.
A forbidden romance, teachers with dark secrets, corrupt police officers, a hitman, an unwittingly pregnant aunt, an anti-abortionist Reverend, a scheming headmaster, a crime boss, and an iPod with an infinite song list mush together in a bottomless pit of absurdity that threatens to swallow her whole.
Carrie’s problem, however, isn’t to dig herself out off the pit but to escape her own egocentric myopia. And as she discovers the truth about her friend's death, her escape meets its opposition.
Ripples in a Pond follows an upbeat tone similar to 12 Bliss Street by Martha Conway and dives into the thoughts and actions of a narcissistic individual much like Gone Girl by Gillian Flynn.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Warmest regards, Adonis Adoni