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Hello everyone! I am looking for some help with my query. I have read that when querying a multiple POV novel, you should write the query from one perspective (See queryshark and other sources). I tried this. I wrote a conventional query from only one perspective (Kala), and sent the query out to around 16 agents. I got some rejections and some non responses! I think it's not possible to write my query from one perspective and effectively summarize my book! The Things You Can't Imagine is told from three main perspectives separated by thousands of years and for one character an entire planet! These perspectives and timelines eventually come together and make sense, which I call "worlds colliding".
I've decided to attempt a more unconventional query. I want to introduce my three main characters and set up each of their stories in the query. I haven't included all of the stakes and choices as this would make each section too long. This query has driven me crazy to write (as did writing the book!!! :D) I really want an opinion about whether you think this would make an agent want to read more. I can barely bare to look at my query anymore! I know this could still be polished, but I basically want to know if this unconventional approach works at all. Do you want to know more?! Thanks in advance...
What if imagination is the most powerful force in the universe?
15 year old Leo’s dad often brings strange artifacts home from the museum where he works, but Leo’s never seen anything like the golden orb before. When a light shoots from the orb’s top, and a tiny holographic boy materializes, suspended in the beam, Leo wonders if he’s dreaming. It turns out that the orb’s an ancient Sumerian video camera, and thousands of years ago a boy called Ama used it to record his memories. Ama reveals an alternate history where an alien race has enslaved humanity.
Ama despises The Nephs. The aliens terrorize Ama’s people, patrolling the streets, conducting public executions and stealing human children away in the dead of night. Two years ago, they took Ama’s sister. No one knows why the Nephs take children, but rumour abounds: they eat them, they perform experiments of them, they syphon their imaginations to power their technology. When a Neph rebel informs Ama of a secret resistance and says that his sister is alive, Ama will enter the hive—a mountainous fortress where the Nephilim live—to save her.
On planet Ki, Kala's AI life-core instructor teaches her that Ama descended from the sky and founded civilization. Like everyone else, Kala, considers it nothing more than legend until a star garden is discovered in the mountains. The star garden is a long lost, imagination fueled technology that Ama and The Founders used to manipulate the cosmos. The technology has the potential to birth a new a golden age, but Kala's people can't imagine. They lost that ability generations ago. Three worlds collide in THE THINGS YOU CAN”T IMAGINE (complete at 95,000 words), an action packed story told from three main perspectives. TTUCI will appeal to fans of speculative fiction like "All the Birds in the Sky", explorations of the future and VR like "Ready Player One" or those who just like a good, bloody romp, like in my favourite YA novel "Bloodtide."