Hi all, after all your useful feedback, I've come up with this! I wanted to create a better transition from Ama's section to Kala's, and add stakes to Kala's story. I'm fairly pleased with this version of the query, but am ready for you guys and girls to tell me otherwise!! What do you think? If you were an agent would you request pages?
Also, Arait, mentioned not wanting to read the book because of the mention of Nephelim. This is def a place holder , which will be changed. I don't want to use a name for my alien overlords that already has connotations/ideas associated with it!! As for Ishtar being the fertility goddess...My bad. His character name has been changed to Shamash, though he doesn't appear in this query, he is important in the story.
Again, thanks in advance for your comments and help.
Imagination is the most powerful force in the universe.
15-year-old Leo’s dad often brings strange artifacts home from the museum where he works, but Leo’s never seen anything like the golden orb before. When a light shoots from the orb’s top, and a tiny holographic boy materializes, suspended in the beam, Leo wonders if he’s dreaming. It turns out that the orb is an ancient Sumerian video camera, and thousands of years ago, a boy called Ama used it to record his memories. Ama reveals an alternate history where an alien race has enslaved humanity.
Ama despises The Nephs. The aliens terrorize Ama’s people, patrolling the streets, conducting public executions and stealing human children away in the dead of night. Two years ago, they took Ama’s sister. When a Neph rebel informs Ama of a secret resistance and says that his sister is alive, Ama enters the hive—a mountainous fortress where the Nephs live—to save her. Ama finds the city’s children drugged and bound in ‘dream rooms’. The Nephs siphon the children’s imaginations to power their technology. Before the children can be released, they must perform one more act, and use their imaginations to wake Enki. Only a god can rid the city of the alien scourge. But releasing Enki rouses the Sumerian pantheon, and when Enlil, the god of storms floods the city, there is only one escape. The sky boat at the hive’s pinnacle.
On planet Ki, Kala's AI life-core instructor teaches her that Ama descended from the sky and founded civilization. Like everyone else, Kala, considers it nothing more than legend until the discovery of a star garden in the mountains. The star garden is a long lost, imagination fueled technology that Ama and The Founders used to manipulate the cosmos. ACCORD, a powerful and mysterious organization, say that the technology heralds a new golden age, but Kishan's lost the ability to imagine generations ago. When ACCORD provide a far out solution, Kala begins to wonder if they are really the benevolent force she’s been brought up to believe.
Three worlds collide in THE THINGS YOU CAN”T IMAGINE (complete at 95,000). In TTUCI “All the Birds in the Sky,” meets “Ready Player One”, injected with a large dose of “Bloodtide’s” violence.