Note: Newest Draft (#2) is now on Post #7
Thanks everyone who takes the time to look at this rough draft.
I will do my best to reciprocate a critique for anyone who critiques. It might be at a slower rate than average user though--I probably will only be able to do 1-2 critiques a day.
(Old/Former) Draft 1
Ohshus is a mediocre binder—a melder of energy between worlds—and not one for civil wars. But after ending up on the wrong side of one, he finds himself cut off from the only life he ever wanted to live. Now Ohshus has to disappear out of the reach of his former order if he wants to stay alive. This sets him on a path through violent lands held by creatures that whole armies are afraid to face. Innumerable hordes of ikers infest the Great Rifts, and far worse, the shuuv—hulking beasts crudely gouged with human features—restlessly rove the plains.
To survive this, Ohshus must form and capably lead a band of fighters as desperate as he is. But the real problem is Ohshus is not a capable leader. And he probably never will be. The further their company strays from civilization, the more Ohshus fears he's losing control of his company, the only thing that may be able to keep them alive. Matters spin further out of his grasp when, in a place long secluded from civilization, they inadvertently awaken a very old power that could threaten the world they just left behind. But Ohshus and his company aren’t going to save the world. They'll be lucky if they can save themselves.
Their story doesn’t matter to their world, but it matters to them.
THE SHIRK MASTER is a 113,000 word epic fantasy novel available upon request. This story is a standalone with series potential. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Thank you for your time and consideration,