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#1 Thrash

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Posted 24 February 2018 - 06:01 PM

Not really a fact check but  I'm reaching for options here.  To advance my story a character needs to die suddenly & tragically.  I don't want it to be a car wreck because while statistically, if healthy people die suddenly that's usually why, but it's awfully overdone, right?  It needs to be something relatively common, because it will trigger the memory of previous deaths from MC's very young childhood--and that incident killed two--and that coincidence should be relatively believable. 

 

I'm stuck because I can't get car wreck out of my mind.  



#2 lnloft

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Posted 24 February 2018 - 07:01 PM

Struck by lightning, drowning, anaphylactic shock from a bee sting or other allergy (which could be a nice one because you could very subtly set it up by briefly establishing the character has said allergy), mugging gone wrong...


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Posted 24 February 2018 - 07:02 PM

I was going to say an aneurism, but then read it had to kill two others as well.  Can the death be natural causes?

They could get buried in an avalanche.  That can kill multiple people.  Or getting lost in the backcountry and dying of exposure.

Or killed in a house fire.

Or a drug overdose (if it fits with their lifestyle.)



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Posted 25 February 2018 - 12:05 AM

Just a fun writing tip to make deaths more meaningful:

 

There are four kinds of ways a character can face a deadly situation:

  • They think they are going to die  and die
  • They think they are going to die  and don't die
  • They don't think they will die       and die
  • They don't think they will die       and don't die

The kinds of situations this can apply to can be a character prepping for a fight, a natural disaster, a heroic action, etc.

 

Also, now actually answering the question: getting mugged, drowning, choking, lightning, on a high and does something stupid, gets hit by a motorcycle (lol jk).

 

I hope this helps a little bit to spark the embers of creativity!


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Posted 25 February 2018 - 01:14 PM

I was going to suggest drowning, because it can happen in so many ways: river rafting, in a pool, swimming in the ocean, boat capsizing, etc. So the circumstances of the first event don't have to coordinate exactly with the second, like it would in, say, a house fire or drug overdose.

 

You could even set up the first event as an unsolved murder. Just a thought...


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Posted 26 February 2018 - 09:56 AM

A drug overdose is certainly a possibility, though it also says something about the character, and that may not be accurate to your story.

 

If you don't like car accident, how about a boat accident? Take a late night boat ride -- a dark, moonless night -- add alcohol and velocity. Mix with other noises to help drown out the dinging of a bell on a buoy in the rocky jetty in the harbor. And you've got yourself a recipe for awful, repeatable death.



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Posted 27 February 2018 - 02:10 AM

I'd say drowning. Of the 3 people from my high school class who have died (in real life) one was a car accident, one drowned swimming in a river with strong currents, and one drowned in a flash flood. The danger from water is so hard to evaluate. It is often confident, healthy young men who overestimate their abilities (maybe that fits your plot.)



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Posted 03 March 2018 - 12:24 AM

I endorse the allergy one, make subtle mention of it as an innocuous character trait and people won't feel cheated by the death they'll almost feel like they should have seen it coming.



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Posted 13 March 2018 - 07:35 AM

I vote electrocution.  Quick, simple, and there are a million ways that it can happen.






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