New Version post #7
Hello! I would really appreciate feedback on the first 250 words of my book. I'm happy to return the favor.
Darkness flees when an amber light pierces my vision. I look at my seat belt in a daze to find it still on and pressing firmly against my ribs. It probably saved me from the hell-raising crash. The airbag ironically did not deploy. Well, that was a waste of money. My brain pulses with the rhythm of my heartbeat and buzzes ferociously as if wasps were nesting in my ears. When my mind finally settles, I realize that the tree outside isn't upright. Wait, is it upside down? Or am I upside down? I finally recognize the blood rushing to my head and my brother's necklace dangling in front of my face. It’s slim, blue gemstone hangs in midair from its thin, leather chain. "Always looking out for me, aren't you?" I suggest to the piece of jewelry. It doesn't respond, of course. I'm not that insane. When I unbuckle my seatbelt, a massive weight is lifted from my lungs and a torrid gust rushes in. My brief remedy is interrupted when my face collides with the roof below me. Glass shards leave me with some lovely cuts that mark my teenage complexion. "Scars look good on girls, right? Oh wait, that's for guys..." I joke to reassure myself. My eyes widen when I do not find a door attached to the gaping hole beside me. I swallow dryly and position myself to roll out of the crude opening.