I would appreciate any and all comments/critiques on draft one of this query. Also, if anyone has better comp titles, please let me know. Feel free to leave a link to your post in the comments and I'll provide critiques as well.
TRY NUMBER 3 IS POST #13
Theo Ivorocono is not too bothered with raising his four daughters. His only goal is finishing the world-changing experiment he started with his deceased wife. This task leaves little time for parenting.
His teenage daughters are left to raise themselves in Fritica, a country on the verge of a second civil war. When one sister gets the chance of a lifetime, her only choice is to go to the East, the enemy side. This proposal starts a chain of events which separates the sisters for the first time in their lives.
With one sister seduced to the East, another sister leaves to study at a monastery. The monastery houses a fortune teller with the secret to finishing Theo's experiment. Theo's oldest daughter joins the military to financially support the family; and his second oldest is left alone at home where she wreaks havoc with an underground gang of smugglers and thieves.
Theo sees opportunity in each of their situations. Even if they don't respect him, his daughters can help find the experiment's missing pieces -- the magic his wife sought. But when the war starts, Fritica's fate and the end of Theo's experiment aren't the only things endangered. The family separating at such a tumultuous time means the Ivoroconos may never reunite again.
THE FOUR IVOROCONO GIRLS is Low Fantasy YA complete at 97,000 words. Set in a futuristic Antarctica, the story unfolds through the eyes of each Ivorocono daughter. This story is like Louisa May Alcott's LITTLE WOMEN met Leigh Bardugo's SIX OF CROWS.
Thank you for your time and consideration.