***Current as of 2:00 PM EDT on 19 April 18. Newest revision in post #1.***
Chapter Negative One: Query, RED INITIATE
RED INIIATE is a 130k word, character driven first-person narrative that should appeal to fans of Patrick Rothfuss' Kingkiller Chronicles. Since the main character, Red, has a paranoid voice in his head, I hope you'll appreciate my jovial mistrust of genre expectations while using Fantasy ideas to push what I've learned as an engineer into the realm of Science Fiction. I also tastefully include romance and respectfully reject the expectation that Literary Fiction belongs only to intellectuals. - M. Kuriel
I need help to save my extra mental voice.
No. Wisdom is in no danger.
Stop whining. I've less than a month to figure out how to beat the Term of Remembrance.
No need. Calm down.
Can't. All I know about it is the name and that Kylia assists the ToR administrator. I'll ask her for help.
She isn't trustworthy.
Right. And she'll probably think I'm mad.
What if I show her some of what my inner voice of wisdom has taught me?
That would ruin six orbits of pretending to be barely average without any guarantee of a favorable outcome.
Life is risk.
No, it's risk management. Analyze options.
Ok. One, do nothing, have a ToR as part of final Initiate tests, and lose Wisdom.
No, that's -
Two, ask for help, beat the ToR, advance to Novice.
That isn't -
Three, leave the Mage Sanctum only to starve to death. In the rain. Again.
The first time proved that It isn't possible to starve to death anymore.
Lucky for me. Is there a fourth option?
Four: Ask for help, reveal Battle Mage potential, die in 'training accident.'
Not liking these options. Anything else?
Five: Ask for help, reveal and lose Wisdom, get cut off from Talent, and get put into another cage by a sexual predator.
Hmm...sometimes Wisdom sounds paranoid.
It isn't paranoia if it's true.
That's option six! I'll prove that The Great Red is not paranoid or insane.
Interesting... That will require aspects of all the other options.
Sold. Let's get to work.
[Closing pleasantries and POC info]
(yes, the word count has increased... I discovered a lot of (sigh) extraneous telling as I went through my latest edit and have had to increase the word count to show pertinent details. Apparently, since I'm just crazy enough to apply the label of Literary Fiction to my work, I've set set myself free from many genre expectations.)
The response to this latest version evoked a startling personal realization that might help communicate my reason for sharing on this site:
The shotgun approach isn't for me. This process hasn't, for me, been about perfecting a query body I can then adapt and send to fifty agents/publishers to hopefully get 15 responses and a single agent/publisher. It's about distilling my story down to query requirements so I can craft individual queries to specifically chosen recipients.
So I approach query writing from many different angles and collect feedback about what comes across each time. When the time comes, I'll craft six unique queries for six unique recipients.
So yeah, I'm all over the place on this forum. Approaching the same topic from every perspective I can imagine is part of how I learn and explore.
I can get how it could frustrate the people who stop to give feedback. That's not my intent; I'm grateful for all feedback: learning communication requires information exchange.