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UPDATED!! NEW SYNOPSIS
LUX STRICKLAND is a mute seventeen-year-old girl who was born into the cursed kingdom of Nightling. Lux has lived her entire life in the dark because her kingdom is trapped in eternal winter and she has no idea how to break the curse. Although she cannot speak, she can understand the animals in her kingdom when they talk and she communicates with them through sign language. When unwanted vagrants come seeking refuge, her crow, AVALON, becomes her voice by interpreting for Lux in spoken English.
After her parents’ suicides, Lux becomes the Queen of Nightling and grows into a vengeful teen whose rage is fuelled by the abandonment of her parents. Her distrust of humans is solidified by the few vagrants whom she has allowed into her Kingdom, who promised friendship only to abandon her. The latest vagrant is a teenage boy from the Ravanna Kingdom, KAI WATERSTONE, whom Lux has begun to have feelings for despite being wary of trusting him.
When another vagrant comes knocking at Nightling, Lux instructs her wolf pack, lead by LEOD, to throw him into the Poisoned River that runs throughout her kingdom. When the wolves begin to act strangely after the event, they admit that something went wrong with the man but refuse to say what.
The next day, Lux finds that Leod and Avalon have been stolen from her kingdom. An anonymous note informs her that if she does not leave Nightling by tomorrow, Leod and Avalon will be murdered.
Lux reluctantly leaves Nightling, her wolf pack and Kai behind to search for them. Joining in her search is TIMMY, a vagrant and former lover whom she once granted refuge at Nightling. At first, Lux is relieved that she will have someone to speak for her in the next Kingdom but Lux begins to distrust Timmy’s intentions in finding her animals. She abandons him, continues her journey alone and finds a way to communicate through books with strangers.
When Lux finds out that her animals are being held in the heavily guarded and dangerous Lannox Kingdom, she finds a man called FARROW, who insists he can help sneak her in.
But in the hours before they are to leave for Lannox, Timmy finds Lux at Farrow’s house. He insists that Farrow is preparing to betray her by handing her over to the guards as soon as they arrive in Lannox.
Farrow confronts Timmy who denies the allegation, and insists that it is Timmy who is preparing to betray her in Lannox. Lux does not know who to trust and flees to Lannox by herself with the two men in pursuit.
She finds a way into the dungeons and though she searches, she realizes her animals were never brought there. Timmy confronts her in the dungeons and reveals himself to be the true betrayer. He hands her over to the guards who lock her in the dungeons.
Alone in the dungeon, she finally breaks down and allows herself to grieve over her parent’s death, ridding herself of the rage she has always carried.
A prison guard appears and Lux realises that he is the man who was thrown into the Poisoned River by her wolves. The man is twenty years younger than he was just weeks ago and mentions that the Poisoned River changed him for the good when he was thrown in. He releases Lux from the dungeon and tells her that her animals are in the Lannox castle. Lux flees to the castle and finds Leod and Avalon there, unharmed and ecstatic that Lux came to save them.
They flee together back to Nightling. As soon as they return home they see the rest of the wolf pack lying dead in the snow and a small army of soldiers littering her kingdom. Broken, Lux walks into her castle to find Kai sitting on her throne.
He berates her for not allowing more vagrants into Nightling over the years, telling her that she was selfish and cruel to keep the kingdom to herself when others, like his family, desperately needed refuge. He admits that he watched his family starve to death in the Ravanna Kingdom and Lux realizes that she was wrong to close Nightling to others.
With the guards help, Kai punishes Lux by throwing her into the Poisoned River. As soon as she hits the water, Lux hears the river speak. It tells her that as a baby, her parents bathed her in the river and that it is the key to the curse: The kingdom changes to reflect the soul of the person thrown into the Poisoned River. It also takes something from a person and leaves them with one gift.
Because Lux was once rage-filled and cruel, the Kingdom became cold and dark. But now that she has forgiven her parents and healed herself of rage, the Kingdom reflects her new soul. When she emerges from Nightling, the Kingdom has completely changed. It is now full of sunlight and colour.
When Lux emerges from the Poisoned River, everyone is stunned to witness the new Nightling. When the soldiers and Kai ask her how the kingdom changed, Lux opens her mouth and speaks. The Poisoned River has finally given her voice back. She knows that if she falls back into her pattern of hating people then the Poisoned River will punish her again. So, instead, she tells Kai that she forgives him for everything he has done and asks him to forgive her for letting his family die. The rest of the surviving wolf pack drive Kai and the soldiers out of Nightling.
In the final scene, Lux opens the doors of Nightling with Leod and Avalon and allows people inside her new and colourful Kingdom.