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Thank you for all the feedback I was given on my first and second draft. I addressed many of the concerns and rewrote a third draft. Any critique is appreciated and I will return the favor!
I completed my manuscript & query for a YA Dystopian Novel and would love some honest feedback!
Hello Ms./Mr. Agent,
I am seeking representation for my 96,000 word Young Adult Dystopian novel THE ISLAND. I have chosen to submit to you because_(will fill this out based on each agents profile)____.
Rachel Ives lives imprisoned on a quarantined island in the Western Division, with the thousands of other citizens who have succumbed to a merciless government. Living in slums, the citizen’s slave away at hard labor jobs out of fear of being taken. The mystery of where they go and what happens next haunts them as the population quickly thins out.
To her horror, her best friend Zander is among four others selected to fly out to the other side of the island, the Eastern Division, for reasons unknown. Shortly after, a young man with no record of existing arrives with a mysterious connection to her deceased father. The islands secrets begin to unravel and Rachel becomes immersed in a treacherous plot, putting the lives of thousands of citizens in jeopardy, unveiling the fatal flaws of her father’s plan and the danger that comes with trusting the friends you thought you knew.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
***I have published some short stories in various literary magazines (one was a high school magazine, another was a university magazine, and the other two were regular magazines based out of New York), but none of them are prestigious. Should I mention them in a brief bio or is it best to leave them out?