Slightly putting the cart before the horse, but I like to write my queries while I work on my novel drafts to frame the meat of my story and keep me on track. I've been shaping this one for a couple of weeks and would like to get some feedback on it from other pairs of eyes besides my own!
Dear [AGENT NAME],
Seventeen-year-old Louise Brunais has a treasure map that any pirate would gladly kill for. As a bloodthirsty pirate herself, she’d kill someone for it, too.
Louise and her pirate clan are searching for the Nuit de Tristesse treasure, a royal hoard that vanished over two hundred years ago. With the map, the help of a handsome navy-seaman-turned-prisoner, and a crew of brigands and bastards, she’s well on her way to becoming a legend. But she knows that all the riches in the sea won't save her dying brother, Ward, from the white sickness plaguing the Aquavian Commonwealth.
When a rival clan offers her a wish in exchange for her help in leading them to the treasure, the hunt becomes about more than gold and gems. In a territory where magic has been squashed out, a wish is a rare black-market find, worth more than every piece of eight she's ever seen. Louise knows a trade like that is bound to have strings attached.
Getting that wish means betraying her clan and indebting herself to her enemies -- but it’s her only chance to keep Ward alive. Battling sea monsters, exploring strange caves, and unearthing long-lost treasure might be the easy part.
NIGHT OF SORROWS is a young adult fantasy novel, complete at XX,XXX words. It is a standalone with series potential, and will appeal to fans of dark, weird magic and strong-willed heroines, like CARAVAL by Stephanie Garber and GRAY WOLF ISLAND by Tracey Neithercott.
[PERSONALIZATION AND INCLUDED MATERIAL HERE.] Thank you for your consideration.