Newest versions are always here.
1. I am aware that this still needs a lot of work, but I couldn't have gotten this far without everyone helping me! Big appreciation to everyone in this supportive community!
2. Addressing what a few of you have mentioned, I have attempted to tie the hook back into the rest of the query in this version.
3. I have changed the ending so that the focus is more on Alice rather than Jake
4. After reading more books in this topic, I think my genre borders woman's fiction, rather than romance :)
Dear Ms. [Agent],
Most desire to fall in love. But, not Alice Bakers. Especially after her manipulative ex, Seth, turns violent. Because he is a respected police officer, the only way to cleanse herself from his influence is to commit a crime.
For Alice, a small crime is a good start. She trespasses on hotel property to lay by the pool and mull things over. Charming hotel manager Jake disrupts her quiet time, and his playfulness shatters Alice’s hardened defenses, forever changing her openness to falling in love. However, this relationship enrages Seth. When his pleas to win her back deteriorate into a beating, Alice’s resilience motivates her to fight back. And this time, she is not alone. Jake is by her side.
To separate the two love birds, Seth abducts Alice. Chained up and starved like a neglected pet for years, she must find the strength and courage to successfully execute a flawed escape plan.
PIECES OF ALICE is woman’s fiction completed at 98,000 words...
Edited by yawriter, 24 May 2018 - 05:35 PM.