I'm premature in posting this - still working on the novel. But I like doing query critiques as a way to practise tightening up my writing, and I've noticed that sometimes the query will reveal deeper problems with the novel. So what the hell. If anyone wants to critique what I've got, it'll hep me improve my writing and maybe help you with yours. Of course, I'm happy to return the favour.
A note about the title - it's my working title. I'll have something better when I'm ready to submit. Also the bio is a little more informal than I'll probably end up with.
Thanks in advance!
Dear Awesome Agent:
Vee Armstrong was forced to suppress anger all her life—through meditation, distraction, and even pain. When she turns seventeen, she learns why.
She’s attacked while celebrating her birthday with her best friend, Pix. Despite all her tricks, Vee gets pissed. And her rage takes the form of a snake that can maim and kill at her command.
Her father tells her she’s descended from Medusa. He'd kept that tidbit from her until he was sure she'd develop this power. Awesome. Vee got the belt when she got mad, just in case, but didn’t get to know why.
Her grandmother says if her snake escapes, the enforcer—aka the hottest boy in school—will lop off her head. Which explains why he’s been talking to Vee. He’s not flirting. He’s sussing her out. Vee bends to her grandmother's will and wears a hairshirt, the constant pain keeping her snake at bay.
But now Pix wants Vee to use her power on a serial abuser. And of course Vee wants to protect a vulnerable kid. She’s not a mons … well, okay, she is a monster. But a good one. One confident enough to defy her grandmother, outwit the enforcer, and find the line between protection and murder. Fingers crossed.
ARE YOU THERE ZEUS, IT’S ME, MEDUSA is an urban fantasy YA novel complete at 82,000 words. I’m a lawyer and single mom to two teenage boys (send wine, and noseplugs). I sing in a punk rock choir, scramble in forests with my badass ladies’ hiking group, the Viking Fucking Warriors, and bake. This is my first novel.