Heyyyyy,, just an FYI. If I looked over your query, I'm not looking for a crit back. I'm just trying to help. I've recently finalized my query given the advice I've gotten and am letting it rest for awhile until I've decided whether it's a go. Won't be able to tell until I haven't looked at it for a bit. So again, no need to pay back the favor, I'm just trying to be nice. :)
Dear Agent McAgent,
On Christmas day, seventeen-year-old Ky Abelson’s brother, Tristan, is branded an untreatable cancer patient. Now life can’t prove to be any more than an unfair pile of shit. Until Ky’s attacked…by himself. Some corpse-colored, alternate reality version of him that makes hospital visits seem like a pastime. He lunges a knife at Ky’s chest while asking one question:
Where is Tristan?
When Ky bashes his freaky double’s head with a bat, it runs leaving behind a tiny lump of metal. It nearly freezes a hole through Ky’s hand, but is proof he isn’t nuts and the key to figuring out why his double wants Tristan. First, it speaks to Ky, and then it vibrates. When Ky finally figures out how to turn it on, his stomach drops into his butt. The lump transmits dozens of images of alternate reality Tristans—all dead.
The goddamn dimensional doppelganger is Ky, yet somehow, everything he wouldn’t be. A brother killer that has everything to do with Tristan’s aggressive cancer, and Tristan’s running out of time. But suddenly so is Ky. Several classmates he wouldn’t have minded never seeing again are showing up in the morgue. His double has to be the reason, but that’s not what the police think. Now Ky’s left with a shit option and shittier one: Track down his double to get evidence of his existence and risk losing his brother and freedom. Or save Tristan by doing the one thing that’ll prove Ky’s way more like his double than he’s willing to discover…killing it.
Complete at 94,000 words, WHEN I SEE ME is young adult suspense with science fiction elements and LGBT characters.