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#1 Raserei

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Posted 19 September 2018 - 08:53 PM

Trying to start getting a handle on this. Any constructive criticism welcome. I've done three to get my feet wet.

 

The worlds of a ruler that loses more than just a throne, a good samaritan that doesn’t shut up, and a maimed seeress converge on each other with seemingly the same goal, but each hold deep secrets. The fate of a nation depends on their ability to discern truth from deception, and whether or not they succumb to their pasts, or overcome it.

 

When a pyromancer tyrant loses more than his throne, he endures a barrage of challenges to make sense of his new world, including a good samaritan who won’t shut up, a maimed seeress, and a benevolent king who doesn’t trust any of them.

 

In the aftermath of losing everything, a pyromancer overlord plans revenge on his apprentice, but now he’s surrounded by undesirables - a chatty samaritan and a maimed seeress - and then the assassins start showing up.

 

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#2 JoQwerty

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Posted 20 September 2018 - 02:56 AM

Ideally a pitch should, in 50 words or less, convey:

 

  • The inciting incident.
  • The MC (identified by role and possibly a flaw).
  • The MC's goal (or main action and obstacles standing in the way of that goal).
  • The MC's stake.

 

(Bonus points if you can get all that in under 25 words. :wink: )

 

And you need to be specific about the inciting incident and the goals. "Fate of the nation", "make sense of his new world", "losing everything," "revenge on his apprentice" are all to vague. Be explicit about what happened and what has to be done next.

 

Example:

 

When a dragon kidnaps the princess, a squire must overcome his fear of fire to kill the dragon, save the princess and win his spurs.






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