Hey all! I'm starting to query a new project, and would like feedback on the query I wrote. Any feedback is appreciated, and I'll return the favor :)
This is very bare-bones, and I'm ready to start editing and revising. Right now, what sticks out, is the last sentence...
Louisa Carter outed seventeen-year-old Pierce Young at the last school pep rally.
He hated her for it, but he never wanted her to die. Which was exactly what she did. One week later. In car crash.
By the time Pierce heard the news, he didn’t care. He had already found Mason Reyes, the other secret-gay in Little Tilgive High School, who left a note in his locker and stole Pierce’s heart mid-beat.
Then the two skipped their finals and went off to live gayly ever after, right?
Louisa-incarnate appeared to Pierce in his bedroom later that night, saying Pierce had to forgive her before she could move on.
What started as a simple, high school, first-love moosh fest turns into a journey across time and death, where Pierce must confront his own insecurities and fight to forgive Louisa. Or else… Louisa would keep bothering him.
OUT is a quirky contemporary young adult novel, complete at 57,000 words.