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#41 Joseph Isaacs

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Posted 26 January 2019 - 09:38 AM


10th try





Beth Wincander will never turn twelve. nice!

The last three Wincander children went missing before their twelfth birthday, and now Beth, at eleven, is on the run awesome!


When the Wincander Witch comes for her in the night, she (is revealed to be?)


Beth’s estranged grandaunt, who snatches Beth and locks her in a cottage -occupied by only ravens -. Beth is told to be quiet and stay put, but she doesn’t understand why she’s imprisoned. All she is allowed to do is j- read books and eat cookies all day sounds good to me:-b. But when another witch, Velma, comes to curse Beth, the girl realizes the cottage was never a prison, but a fortress. the only problem here is eating cookies and reading books doesn't sound too harsh so its no shock it turns out not to be a fortress. maybe cut the thing about cookies and books? perhaps- realizes she was imprisoned for her own protection


Velma is hellbent hell-bent on spiting the Wincander Witch; she's already turned the other Wincander children into ravens, and now she's hunting Beth. The Wincander Witch manages to hide the girl, but for how long? Beth wants nothing more than to remain human and return home. But to break the curse, Beth must plunge into the thorny history between the two witches, and she isn’t sure whether this will save her family or land her in Velma’s clutches.  Awesome! you are getting close


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