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THE WOLF, THE CROW, AND THE QUEEN.


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#1 SnowFox23

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Posted 18 December 2018 - 05:35 AM

Hello, can you tell me which hook you prefer:

 

The only thing stranger than a kingdom of eternal night is the queen who rules it.

 

OR

 

The kingdom of Nightling is cursed with eternal night, and if the cold doesn't kill you, the queen gladly will.



#2 VickyRosly

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Posted 18 December 2018 - 08:11 AM

The second one has me intrigued. :)


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#3 lnloft

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Posted 19 December 2018 - 07:29 PM

The second is better because it actually shows us something specific rather than telling us the queen is "strange".


Nothing to reciprocate on right now; I'm off in the query trenches.


#4 Andrew Joyce

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Posted 06 March 2019 - 02:23 PM

You got a winner with the second. Makes me want to read the book.






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