BENEATH THE DOOMSDAY SKY (Epic Fantasy)
Posted 19 December 2018 - 06:35 PM
Posted 06 January 2019 - 07:03 PM
Heya, hope my advice can be of some use! I've got a soft spot for fantasy, since it's my preferred genre to write.
People once knew me as the sort of thief who could steal a hoard of gold from beneath a dragon’s
very nose (this isn't too grabbing as a hook. It's a bit clunky, and it just reads as backstory. I like to see stories immediately throw me into what is happening, not what happened previously.). Anyone who sought to crack a runic vault or plant a bit of blackmail needed only ask for Emelith the Finder. But all of that came to a crashing halt after my job in Faral Muzafti. (We've just gotten two extremely complicated names in the first three sentences. I'd cut one of the two.)
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