REVISION IN #7. I appreciate everyone's help!
It's been a long while since I've posted here, so I'm a bit out of practice, but I am hoping for some feedback on a query that I'd like to start sending out to agents. Critiques will be returned, of course. I've left off my bio for simplicity's sake. Thank you!
Dear [insert agent name]:
By the winter of 1898, Dr. William Garrett and his daughter had built a respectable medical practice in Baltimore, Maryland, but when he learns of his father’s suicide, he must leave his successful life and return home to Ravenswood Hall, where his mother died under suspicious circumstances nearly twenty years before.
He arrives to find that a stranger, famed French painter, Eleanor Laveau, has taken up residence in the upper rooms of the old mansion. Disturbed as much by this violation as by the singular expression of horror in her eyes at the mention of his father’s name, William vows to expose her true identity, for she may know more than she claims. When both the housekeeper’s daughter and the family doctor are found dead, and William begins to see strange apparitions in the attic, he realizes that a force much more sinister may be at work within the walls of his childhood home.
Plagued by nightmares and fearing madness, William calls upon his daughter, Lottie, a nurse and amateur spiritualist, to join him at Ravenswood. When she suddenly vanishes, he is forced to face the phantoms, whether real or imagined, entirely alone. William must exhume his own past along with the ghosts of Ravenswood Hall if he wishes to find his daughter alive.
Written in an epistolary style to the tune of Wilke Collin’s A Woman in White and Bram Stoker’s Dracula, RAVENSWOOD is a gothic mystery, complete at 65,000 words, which will appeal to fans of Susan Hill and Daphne Du Maurier alike. [Bio here]
Thank you for your time and consideration.