A few years back I posted a few critiques here, at the time I was working on this project, which I now finished. I submitted it to agents a few days back, and so far only got two rejections. I'd love to hear what you all think about my query, so here it is:
There are two things you absolutely must know about tree-dwarves: they live inside trees, obviously, and they never, ever leave their town, the County of Thombling.
Twelve-year old Horace Wheatson is fine with the first rule; he quite enjoys living in trees, even though his particular tree-burrow, the Thombling Home for Unwanted and Disregarded Children, is far from cozy. And if you ask Horace, that second rule just goes without saying. Everyone knows that Eaohl is a terribly dangerous land, all with dragons, goblins and those stinky, detestable wizards. Horace’s two best friends, Grindel and Harriet, talk constantly about leaving Thombling, but he knows they wouldn’t last long outside its borders.
His life turns upside down when Grindel flees without warning, an event so rare it sends the entire County into an uproar. Determined to find Grindel and bring him back, Horace must face his lifelong fears of the outside world and enter the terrifying River Mouth Woods. With the help of an enthusiastic Harriet, finding Grindel proves to be the easy part, as they soon learn of something terrible: the dreaded wizards want Horace dead, and they are looking everywhere for him.
Horace has no idea why the wizards want to kill him, and, when trying to learn more, he stumbles upon an obscure riddle whose words point to a mysterious text known only as the book of secrets. The volume might hold the answers Horace is looking for, but in order to find it and save his life, he and his friends must embark on a dangerous journey across the land of Eahol, and go deeper and deeper into a world of adventures and secrets that reveal more about Horace’s unknown past, and Eaohl’s uncertain future, than any of them could have ever imagined.
HORACE WHEATSON AND THE BOOK OF SECRETS is a 73.700 words upper middle-grade fantasy book with series potential. A full manuscript is ready at request.