Update in #5.
Okay, I've been on here extensively in the past for this same query, so I'm not looking for overall query feedback, just which opening paragraph or "hook" is more interesting. I think the first one is clear, but the second has a little more personality. Link to your query and I'll gladly give feedback in return.
#1 Sixteen-year-old Wendy dreams of independence, of a purpose beyond the marriage her father is arranging, but eighteenth century London has little to offer the daughter of a would-be aristocrat. Her only escape is the fairytales she weaves for her brothers after dark, when the candles are snuffed and Father isn’t listening. When Wendy’s family flees England in financial disgrace, a disastrous sea voyage leaves them stranded on an island rumored to shelter the mythical Fountain of Youth. Wendy fights to keep her family intact--and alive--as they encounter pirates, natives who never age and a tight-lipped gang of English waifs. This island has more mysteries than it has flecks of glittering mica, including a boy whose past is a closely guarded secret.
The island offers Wendy a life she thought only existed in fairytales, but rumors of the Fountain reach England and the navy arrives with cannons blazing. To defend the island, Wendy will need the help of a fierce native princess, a one-handed pirate and a boy whose heart beats in tune with the island, a boy with wind in his hair and stars in his eyes, a boy they call Peter. If they succeed, she will have a home forever. If they fail, the island and everyone Wendy has come to care about will be devoured in a cloud of gunpowder and smoke.
#2 Sixteen-year-old Wendy Edavene loves fairytales and her two younger brothers. She does not love the man her Father has chosen for her to marry, but eighteenth-century London has little else to offer the daughter of a would-be aristocrat.
#3 Sixteen-year-old Wendy Edavene would rather be weaving fairytales for her younger brother than preparing for her debut, but that isn’t an option for the daughter of a bankrupt aristocrat in eighteenth century London.