Unfortunately I have not been successful in the query world, and was wondering if anyone out there would be able to take a look and give some feedback. I feel like it might be a little wordy in some parts.
Will reciprocate! :D
Attn: Fantastic Agent X
Dear Mr/Ms X:
Years before the legends address her as Señora Muerte, sarcastic daredevil Luz is Purgatorio’s charity case. Plucked from her job as Hell’s sewer-scraper, she now escorts wayward souls to their penance-filled Afterlife. But taking the girl out of Hell is easier than taking Hell out of the girl, and, when Luz’s pranks accidentally cost one of her coworkers his chance at Heaven, she’s given an ultimatum: shape up, or get shipped back downstairs.
But Luz’s half-hearted efforts to clean up her act accidentally uncover a bigger scheme: someone is cheating Heaven out of its souls, threatening the strict hierarchy of the three-tiered Afterlife. Luz’s penchant for mischief makes her a prime suspect, yet she’s unwilling to accept an eternity of scrubbing Satan’s sewers without a fair fight. Especially when she knows just who is to blame.
Luz soon realises that proving her innocence will require her to recruit the skills of souls from all three realms of the Afterlife, including a starry-eyed Hellboy and a rainbow-loving fool who doesn’t quite match anyone’s idea of an Angel. But the underdogs’ efforts will force the revelation of secrets that should have remained hidden: a secret weapon which, having fallen into the wrong hands, will force Luz to choose between her new friends, her own reputation, and the existence of the Afterlife as it’s currently known.
I am currently seeking representation for OUR LADY OF DEATH, a young adult fantasy novel complete at 83,000 words. A Hispanic-inspired take on Dante’s Divine Comedy, OUR LADY OF DEATH combines the TV show Supernatural with Latino folklore to bring forth an original backstory of La Calavera Catrina, the skeletal personification of death, as she evolves from a vengeful teenage spirit into the legendary Señora Muerte. The story will appeal to readers who prefer dark, grittier stories, such as those of Leigh Bardugo and Sabaa Tahir, similar to Gods of Jade and Shadow and The City of Brass.
((I understand that you…, and would be appreciative if you would consider OUR LADY OF DEATH for representation, tailored to specific agent.))
Thank you for your time.