Update in post 9.
Hello, I posted here a couple of years ago, but before I could submit to agents, I started having problems with my health. These health problems lasted over a year and put me a big writing hiatus. Now that my heath is better, and after a major rewrite too, I'm back in the game. I'm lost how to improve my query, and any feedback is appreciated.
Twelve-year-olds Danvis and Danvic O’Byren, aka “The Twins”, have an unfortunate curse.
These brothers have no separate identities—cursed to think the same thoughts, speak in unison, and do everything else the same. They have no family or friends, doomed as the village’s outcasts forever.
Until The Twins stumble upon ancestry secret. They learn they’re the descendants of the Water Keepers—twin legendary heroes who had god powers over the element water from their possession of the Water Scroll. This discovery catches the attention of the preteen princess, who offers them friendship with one request: become the next Water Keepers to stop Forvayin, her father’s advisor, from taking over the throne.
Cursed freaks aren’t meant to be heroes, but when Forvayin tries to kill them, The Twins agrees to help. Besides, they never had friends before; they can’t lose the only friendship they have. But the Scroll is locked away, and even with the princess’s help, the journey leads The Twins one near death experience after another, especially with Forvayin hunting them down.
Just when The Twins think the Scroll is close, Forvayin leads them to a trap where they’re thrown three years into the future. In this future, Forvayin is king, the kingdom is falling apart, and wanted signs for the cursed brothers are everywhere. The only way back home and restore everything is to get the Scroll and defeat the new king, if this future doesn’t kill them first.
WATER SCROLL is a completed 60,000-word MG fantasy novel for kids who love adventure stories such as SEVEN WONDERS and NEVERMORE. For three years, I interned at [deleted] where I edited manuscripts and read submissions.
Thank you for your time and consideration.