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#21 Litgal

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Posted 19 October 2011 - 08:23 AM

From my debut novel, The Sister Queens:

"There is a special circle in hell for women who cuckold their husbands."

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Posted 19 October 2011 - 08:27 AM

From my debut novel, The Sister Queens:

"There is a special circle in hell for women who cuckold their husbands."


Ha! I like that! :laugh:

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#23 Pete Morin

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Posted 19 October 2011 - 08:28 AM

Eureka, another excuse not to write!

Page 185, best line, Diary of a Small Fish:


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Posted 19 October 2011 - 08:47 AM

OMG that's funny! Even funnier because, here I had this crazy idea you were writing children's books.


Bloom, you literally made me laugh out loud. No, I have small children, but I'm not writing stuff for them just yet. I'm in the midst of shifting from writing mostly literary fiction to a more genre-based fiction (in this case, what I hope is amusing science fiction: think Douglas Adams meets Christopher Moore). Then there's also the workaday niche-specific journalism and freelance that pays for milk, diapers and sporadic PBJ sandwiches for the wife and me.

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Posted 19 October 2011 - 08:47 AM

From THINGS NOT SEEN (completed ms):

Alex released his hold and the sleazeoid scuttled back into the building.




From WIP:

She could do ridiculous with her eyes closed.











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Posted 19 October 2011 - 09:33 AM

No, no... I have 3 complete MS's to pull from. :)

This game forces you to one line per MS.


...in THAT case...I'll reach into one of my trunked mss and see what I can find...

From ALLIGATOR BLOOD (technically a WIP but on a far back burner with the flame on "low"), page 83 of 166:

Then there was the why. Dale thought, This is gonna get weird. I just know it.



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Posted 20 October 2011 - 02:08 PM

Then there was the why. Dale thought, This is gonna get weird. I just know it.



Another great line, Tom. You guys are good!

#28 Michael Steven

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Posted 20 October 2011 - 02:15 PM

No, no... I have 3 complete MS's to pull from. :)

This game forces you to one line per MS.


Yeah, I done saw that in them instruction words right up yonder! Let's try a different tack ... do you have a name for the novel from where you pulled that line?
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Posted 24 October 2011 - 09:58 PM

Page 168 of The Forgotten Dark. The page is part of a slow, warm conversation between a main character and a mildly friendly Jack Sparrow-esque character named Olin. He loves to have a good smoke and has just produced an ornate pipe as you come to this line:



“What a spectacular name. Adanna.” Olin let the word hang in the air with the smoke that curled above him. He smiled as he watched it blow away.

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Posted 24 October 2011 - 11:14 PM

That's good, Josh, but look closer. Somewhere around there you should have a single sentence that says "This is what the story is about."

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Posted 25 October 2011 - 12:24 AM

Oh, and Michael, I've pulled from:

Billy Bobble Has a Magic Wand

My Adventures With Hannah In Space: Planet of the Fates

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My Adventures With Hannah In Space: The Morian Treasure

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Posted 25 October 2011 - 10:08 AM

This is really hard. From MR. SNUGGLYMUFFIN'S RAMPAGE: 181 pages, this is from page 91:

The chicken wire her parents put up to prevent her giant hamster from gnawing on the siding served as a perfect ladder to the roof.

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Posted 31 October 2011 - 11:51 AM

Here's my middle line, from THE BONES OF BABYLON, page 141 (of 281):

"And if I stayed human, if I ran away or tried to fight, I'd die along with all the people in Quito who got burnt up and blown out like the end of a match."

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Posted 31 October 2011 - 05:00 PM

Those are two good ones. :)

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Posted 31 October 2011 - 05:02 PM

From my debut novel, The Sister Queens:

"There is a special circle in hell for women who cuckold their husbands."


That could be on the jacket flap!

Oh, wait... too late... it's designed already, huh? ;)

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Posted 31 October 2011 - 05:28 PM

Carter completely let himself go. For one moment, he didn't have to hold the world together.

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Posted 31 October 2011 - 05:30 PM

407 p ms, from p 203

Carter completely let himself go. For one moment, he didn't have to hold the world together.

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Posted 29 November 2011 - 12:05 AM

My re-write on Billy Bobble so far has it at 255 pages, which comes to 127.5 - so I started looking around there for a bookflap-worthy sentence and came up with on page 128:

"The explosion of a super nova can go completely unnoticed in the Quantum World," said Fame, "but one little boy's nightmare can rip it apart."

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 03:27 PM

Lol i had to pull out a calculator to find the middle of my 312 pg. MS for The Mark of Szike. The middle line for pg. 156

Okay mine was a dialogue thing so is it cool that its more than one sentence?

"I've always been aware that being a Szike has influenced my actions, and for once, it's not. I'm calling the shots. My choice is Aaron, and that's how it's going to be."

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 03:28 PM

Here's my middle line, from THE BONES OF BABYLON, page 141 (of 281):

"And if I stayed human, if I ran away or tried to fight, I'd die along with all the people in Quito who got burnt up and blown out like the end of a match."


Sounds awesome!

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