Query on post 250, also down here.
I'm starting the second rewrite of this MS (after getting a flash of inspiration) and I wrote up a new query. Thank you guys! And tear away!
“Finding Nemo” got it wrong. The underwater world is no paradise. It’s a downright nightmare.
Alphi, a white-scaled Pure, shouldn’t care about the Greys, for coral’s sake. But living in a caged village is death for a claustrophobic teen, especially since her species tyrannizes the darker-scaled one. Desperate for an escape—as the slits on her wrist can attest to—Alphi flees her village, only one thing keeping her fins pumping: the legend of a city ruled by Capit, her uncle. A city of freedom.
But when she arrives to the city, the torture of an innocent Grey draws Capit’s and the citizens' applause. This place is no escape. Tear-stained and desperate, she longs to escape, until Zac, a Grey love-struck by Alphi’s compassion for his kind, invites her into a rebel group. It’s a fight against the city—and her own family. She joins.
But secrets lie in her past: secrets of her sister’s suicide and her mother’s desperation. The scars on Alphi’s wrist begin to itch again and it won’t be long until they bleed with the guilt of joining the rebels.
Alphi yearns to escape it all but one cannot simply swim away from loved ones. The scales have been set, and unless Alphi acts either for herself or for her family, she will sink so deep that no one will be left to save her.
Imagine a white Pocahontas in a Little Mermaid setting, all with the flavor of John Green’s LOOKING FOR ALASKA, and you’ll have PURE SEA, GREY WAVES a YA Fantasy complete at ____ words.