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#21 Stephanie Diaz

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Posted 20 June 2011 - 07:49 PM

Prologue: Nine months later – news article reports death of a teen with police investigating. News article appears throughout the novel revealing more details from the case. (I don't think this is at all essential to the synopsis. I'd cut it)

Seventeen-year-old Jennifer Cast (put character names in all caps the first time they're mentioned) is getting ready for a party with her best friend Liz. Jen is nervous, but wants to change her status from geek to popular like her friend. In Jen’s mind, Liz is perfect;(period) she has only one flaw, (colon) she cuts.

At the party, Liz is stepped on by the class loser Kevin Balling and runs off to get drunk. Jen is left talking to Kevin whom she went to grade school with and played tag with at recess. By accident, Kevin is shoved onto Jen and they end up on the floor. Cell phone camera’s catch the action. Pictures of Kevin on top of Jen circulate through the school. It appears that everyone has Kevin on top of Jen the picture on his or her cell phone as well as the internet. Jen is said to be going out with the loser which makes her a loser too. She can’t help but ditch class and hid hide in the bathroom stalls.

On Halloween, Jen wakes up to find that her face has been photo-shopped to a naked picture and is on the school’s website with the tag line: “Give it to me Kevin 8.” Jen becomes known as the slut of the school. The shower becomes a safe haven where the water is making her face raw and red. At one point, she is even bleeding. (the shower makes her bleed? or is she cutting herself?)

By now, Jen hears voices inside her head telling her that she is a slut, a whore, and a loser. Her mind is trapped inside a horror flick where there is no escape. Jen’s worried mother takes her to the doctor. The doctor only sees Jen as a topical typical teenager teenage obsessed with showers. He gives Jen a prescription and suggests to the mother that Jen’s behavior is typical for a girl who’s having sex. Each person Jen knows is playing a character in her movie while she watches from above the scene.

In the spring, Jen returns to her childhood park in hopes to regain herself. Upon seeing the word slut, her mind slips away from her and she is left calling her RLF to pick her up. Her real life friend Liz has been dating a boy that Jen likes for months but picks her up out of pity. On a text message, Liz tells Jen to meet her at the park the next day. When Jen arrives, Liz’s boyfriend and another boy rape her. When Liz arrives to help Jen, she finds Jen naked. Liz had no idea her boyfriend Josh would do this and tries to stand up for Jen. Instead, the boyfriend gets the cell phone and posts pictures of Jen on a blog.

Jen decides to end her life by taking sleeping pills. She is found alive by her brother and rushed to the hospital. Waking up after having her stomach pumped, she learns that her friend Liz hung herself and was pressured into the sexting naked pictures of herself with Jen’s head. Liz’s body is founded with multiple cuts; her memorial webpage is trashed by students.

Upon release of from the hospital, Jen attends a psychiatric hospital where she will slowly recover.
Months later, she is getting ready for college and Kevin comes by the house. The two talk about Liz’s death and say good-bye.


Wow. This is crazy intense, in a good way. I think this is a pretty solid synopsis! Good luck :)

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Posted 22 June 2011 - 12:09 PM

Thank you; the book is intense - I have written several different ways so I know my characters inside and out!! : ) Let's hope the agents feel the same way as you do! Thanks again.
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Posted 25 June 2011 - 04:36 PM

Seventeen-year-old JENNIFER CAST is getting ready for a party with her best friend Liz. Jen is nervous, but wants to change her status from geek to popular like her friend. In Jen’s mind, Liz is perfect. She has only one flaw; she cuts.

At the party, Liz is stepped on by the school’s loser Kevin Balling and runs off to get drunk. Jen is left talking to Kevin whom she went to grade school with and played tag with at recess. By accident, he is shoved onto Jen and they end up on the floor. Cell phone camera’s catch the action. Pictures of Kevin on top of Jen circulate through the party and the internet. It appears that everyone has Kevin on top of Jen on his or her cell phone. Jen is said to be going out with the loser, which makes her a loser too.

On Halloween, Jen wakes up to find that her face has been photo-shopped to a naked picture and is on the school’s website with the tag line: “Give it to me Kevin 8.” Jen becomes known as the slut of the school. The shower becomes a safe haven where the water is making her face raw and red. At one point, she is so raw that her face becomes a bloody mess.

By now, Jen hears voices inside her head telling her that she is a slut, a whore, and a loser. Her mind is inside a horror flick where there is no escape. Each person Jen knows is playing a character in her movie while she watches from above the scene. Jen’s worried mother takes her to the doctor. The doctor only sees Jen as a teenage girl obsessed with showers. He gives Jen a prescription and suggests to the mother that Jen’s behavior is typical for a girl who is having sex.

In the spring, Jen returns to her childhood park in hopes to regain herself. Upon seeing the word slut, her mind slips away from her, she starts hearing voices. Jen is left calling her RLF to pick her up. Her real life friend Liz has been dating a boy that Jen has liked for months. The boyfriend (Josh) is the one who put up the internet pictures and has Liz go to Jen.

On a text message, Liz tells Jen to meet her at the park the next day. When Jen arrives, Josh and another boy from school rape her. When Liz arrives to help Jen, she finds Jen naked. Liz had no idea Josh would do this and tries to stand up for Jen. Instead, the boyfriend sets up a blog telling everyone that Jen is the number one slut to sleep with. He posts pictures of Jen on a blog.

Jen decides to end her life by taking sleeping pills. She is found alive by her brother and rushed to the hospital. Waking up after having her stomach pumped, she learns that Liz hung herself and was pressured into the sexting naked pictures. Liz’s body is founded with multiple cuts.

Upon release out of the hospital, Jen attends Liz’s funeral and then a psychiatric hospital where she will slowly recover. She has a family therapy session in which she tells her parents about rape and the bullying that she received during the year. A year later, Jen is getting ready for college and Kevin comes by the house. The two talk about Liz’s death and say good-bye.
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Posted 25 June 2011 - 07:09 PM

Seventeen-year-old JENNIFER CAST is getting ready for a party with her best friend LIZ. Jen is nervous, but wants to change her status from geek to popular like her friend. In Jen’s mind, Liz is perfect. She has only one flaw;: she cuts. In Jen's mind, Liz is perfect except or one flaw: she cuts.

At the party, Liz is stepped on by the school’s loser KEVIN BALLING and runs off this makes it sound like she's fleeing him? to get drunk. Jen is left talking to Kevin whom she went to grade school with and played tag with at recess. By accident, he is shoved onto Jen and they end up on the floor. Cell phone cameras catch the action. Pictures of Kevin on top of Jen circulate through the party and the internet. It appears that everyone has Kevin on top of Jen on his or her cell phone. Jen is said to be going out with the loser, which makes her a loser too.

On Halloween, Jen wakes up to find that her face has been photo-shopped to a naked picture and is on the school’s website with the tag line: “Give it to me Kevin 8 Maybe I'm behind the times, but what does the number 8 have to do with Kevin giving it to her?.” Jen becomes known as the slut of the school. The shower becomes a safe haven where the water is making her face raw and red. At one point, she is so raw that her face becomes a bloody mess.

By now, Jen hears voices inside her head telling her that she is a slut, a whore, and a loser. Her mind is inside a horror flick where there is no escape. She imagines herself inside a horror flick from which she can't escape, perhaps? Each person Jen knows is playing a character in her movie while she watches from above the scene. Jen’s worried mother takes her to the doctor. The doctor only sees Jen as a teenage girl obsessed with showers. He gives Jen a prescription and suggests to the mother that Jen’s behavior is typical for a girl who is having sex.

In the spring, Jen returns to her childhood park in hopes [to regain herself]. that's awkwardly phrased. Upon seeing the word slut, her mind slips away from her, and she starts hearing voices. Jen is left calling her RLFLiz to pick her up. Her real life friend Liz has been dating a boy that Jen has liked for months. The boyfriend (Josh) is the one who put up the internet pictures and has Liz go to Jen. This part is jumbled and confusing.

On a text message, Liz tells Jen to meet her at the park the next day. When Jen arrives, Josh and another boy from school rape her. When Liz arrives to help Jen, she finds Jen naked. Liz had no idea Josh would do this and tries to stand up for Jen. Instead, the boyfriend sets up a blog telling everyone that Jen is the number one slut to sleep with. He posts pictures of Jen on a blog.

Jen decides to end her life by taking sleeping pills. She is found alive by her brother and rushed to the hospital. Waking up after having her stomach pumped, she learns that Liz hung herself and was pressured into the sexting providing naked pictures. Liz’s body is founded with multiple cuts.

Upon release out of the hospital, Jen attends Liz’s funeral and then a psychiatric hospital where she will slowly recover. She has a family therapy session in which she tells her parents about her rape and the bullying that she received during the year. A year later, Jen is getting ready for college and Kevin comes by the house. The two talk about Liz’s death and say good-bye.


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