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#1 HomeSweetStarbucks

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Posted 04 May 2012 - 10:21 AM

I've been staring at these for hours and can't decide which one I want to run with. I'd love to get any feedback so I can just move on!!
  • Being subjected to psychological warfare at the hands of her co-workers wasn’t exactly what Amelia Clarke had in mind when she was in law school, but welcome to the world of Biglaw where fear, intimidation and the occasional threat of violence are the tactics used to get associates to work harder, stay late and never, ever make a mistake.
  • When Amelia Clarke lands a job at a prestigious law firm in NYC she had visions of expensive suits, attractive colleagues, and glamorous offices overlooking the skyline. Not one of those fantasies included pointing an air canister at her colleague, zapping him with cold air in an effort to wake him from his coke-induced haze.
  • Perched in glittering New York City skyscrapers, a collection of elite law firms lure thousands of Ivy League graduates with promises obscene salaries, generous perks and offices that are run like small cities. This is the world of Biglaw.
  • Amelia Clarke has mountain of student loan debt and a coveted position at a prestigious law firm in NYC that could bail her out of it. She just needs to keep her head down and work. It sounded so easy to her when she accepted the offer at Freedman &Downs, but that was before she realized that a penchant for psychological warfare was practically a job requirement.


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Posted 04 May 2012 - 10:39 AM

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Posted 04 May 2012 - 10:50 AM

That's the one my husband chose too. I was leaning towards #4, so its good to get another point of view. Thank you!

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Posted 04 May 2012 - 11:22 AM

Your welcome. I just like the almost sarcastic feel of it.

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Posted 04 May 2012 - 01:11 PM

I also agree with #1
Rules are meant to be broken.

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Posted 04 May 2012 - 03:19 PM

I also like #1.

"But that's OK. There's treasure children always seek to find.

And just like us, you must have had, a Once Upon A Time."

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Posted 04 May 2012 - 06:39 PM

Thanks everyone! I'm happy that I posted this and avoided going to far down the wrong road.

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Posted 05 May 2012 - 06:07 PM

Like #1, but would have it begin with: "Welcome to the world of Biglaw where fear, intimidation and the occasional threat of violence are the tactics used to get associates like Amelia Clark to work harder, stay late and never, ever make a mistake."

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#9 Cat Porter

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Posted 08 May 2012 - 09:38 AM

I second what Joey said.




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