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Query that got 18 requests, 3 offers of rep, and a partridge in a pear tree.

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#1 MarcyKate


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Posted 21 July 2012 - 07:30 PM

Man, I've been wanting to do this post for YEARS. This my query for MONSTROUS which got 18 requests and 3 offers of representation. And yesterday, I officially signed with Suzie Townsend of New Leaf Literary & Media!! YAY!! :D

Dear Agent,

Most people remember their first crush, first kiss, and first day of school. Kymera remembers none of that.

But she will never forget her first breath.

When Father recreates her from the parts of her broken body, the wings of a raven, the tail of serpent, and a cat’s razor-sharp vision, he gives her life without memories or pain.

But not without a mission.

Kymera knows who murdered her. A wizard in the city of Bryre who is sacrificing the girls of the countryside one by one. He is monstrous and now Father has created a monster to stop him.

Kymera sneaks into Bryre each night, rescuing the captive girls and doing her best to avoid the city’s human inhabitants. Then one night she meets Ren, the king’s page boy, and her resolve weakens. Her nightly missions take on a dual purpose—save the other girls and steal a few moments with the boy who has yet to see her without her cloak.

As she lingers each night, Kymera begins to overhear things: a snide remark about Father, rumors of a hideous beast, and whisperings of a black market dealing solely in live, human goods. Ever since that first breath, she’s known exactly who she is, but now she is forced to ask who is the real monster here—the wizard, her father, or worse, herself?

MONSTROUS, a YA fantasy complete at 85,000 words, is Frankenstein meets the Brothers Grimm told from the viewpoint of the monster as a teenage girl. I believe it will appeal to fans of Daughter of Smoke & Bone and Graceling. I have a MS in Arts Administration from Boston University and as the former marketing director of a professional theatre, I can actively promote my work. My futuristic YA short story “Connected” was recently published in the Spring Fevers Anthology by Elephant’s Bookshelf Press.

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#2 albrock


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Posted 21 July 2012 - 07:40 PM

Congrats! Sounds like a great story--and it must be with all those requests and offers!

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Posted 21 July 2012 - 07:46 PM

I still love your concept and query. Congrats, MK!!! :biggrin:
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#4 C. Taylor

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Posted 21 July 2012 - 08:24 PM

A HUGE CONGRATS, MK!!! Love the concept of your story!!!

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Posted 21 July 2012 - 08:26 PM

Already sent my cheers via twitter, but I'll put extra cheer and yay-ness for you here too!
This is fabulous news and well deserved.
All the best of luck to you. :)
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#6 Lori Sjoberg

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Posted 21 July 2012 - 09:05 PM

Can't wait to see this on the shelves. Congrats!

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Posted 21 July 2012 - 09:28 PM

I've loved this since the first time I read it - such a cool twist!

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Posted 21 July 2012 - 09:30 PM

Nice, and congrats! but remember, the query just got the read. Your writing talent and a good MS did the rest.

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Posted 21 July 2012 - 10:44 PM

Congrats Marcy! I am so happy for you! May all your books to come be as successful!
When Eyes are Opened (series ) - finished MS - editing

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and another WIPs (series) not telling the titles yet .

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Posted 21 July 2012 - 11:38 PM

CONGRATULATIONS!!!! That is SO amazing!! <3 That's definitely going on my TBR list!

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Posted 22 July 2012 - 08:31 AM

Way ta GO, Marcy!!!

Here's wishing for Monstrous sales to go along with the story! :wink: :cool:

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Posted 22 July 2012 - 01:07 PM

Congrats!! Have fun with it all!

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Posted 22 July 2012 - 01:24 PM

You rock, my dear! Can't wait for the other good news in the form of a publishing deal.

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Posted 22 July 2012 - 01:43 PM

This is truly wonderful news and richly deserved!

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Posted 22 July 2012 - 05:16 PM


Most girls are made of
sugar and spice and everything nice; they
screwed up the recipe for me: I'm made of
bat wings and broken things.

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Posted 22 July 2012 - 07:09 PM

YAAAY! This is long overdue MK! Congrats!!

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Posted 23 July 2012 - 05:48 PM

Congrats MK!

I guess you didn't follow a formula on your query letter. And it worked out well, for you.

You have given me food for thought.

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Posted 23 July 2012 - 08:10 PM

Congratulations! Your query is fabulous and your book sounds great. Best of luck.

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Posted 23 July 2012 - 09:07 PM

Beautiful concept. We all need to confront our personal monsters!

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