Kindly critique the synopsis for my 76,000 word novel. I have it to one page. Thanks.
Synopsis: A Beast in Venice (Revised Version)
Set in the ancient streets of modern-day Venice, Brigham Stone, reformed lawyer and now painter in Venice, struggles with the culture, the language, and with fact that his life is more than half over. When he meets fellow expat Charles Raymond, he is thrown into a world of murder, blood, and cannibalism.
Brigham, gin-soaked and disgusted with the state of modern art, unable to find a gallery in the world of Italian protectionism, begins to see some strange things. Men walk through brick walls. Bodies, gutted and otherwise butchered, are pulled foul and stinking from the canals. One of his paintings begins talking to him, giving critical comment and oracular advice. His wife disappears.
Things really get out of hand, though, when he learns that Charles is not just a rich lover of things artistic, but a ghoulish creature known in Venice as a shroud eater.
Charles takes a liking to Brigham and decides to add him to his collection of interesting people. Charles offers him eternal life. To do this, however, Brigham must be converted to a shroud eater. The benefit is that he will live forever. The downside is that he must kill someone every day, and eat their flesh and drink their blood.
Although interested in eternal life, Brigham soon realizes the horrors of what he would have to do, and tries to escape it. Charles is determined, and converts Brigham against his will.
Charles and one of his colleagues come into conflict over Brigham, and they each introduce him to their own way of obtaining their daily bread. For this reason (and others), Charles decides to destroy Brigham.
As horrible as the shroud eater existence is, Brigham is warming up to the idea of eternal life. When he kills the mother of a little girl, however, he is overcome by remorse, and wishes to return to normal. He learns that there is a way to do it, but in the middle of the process, Charles appears and kills the witch who is helping him, and kidnaps Brigham and his friend, hauling them off in a boat.
After a struggle at the top of a large crane, Charles falls to his death, impaled and cut in two by the cross atop a bell tower. Brigham, who’s been shot, stabbed, nail-gunned, and has broken a leg, has about twenty minutes to finish what the witch started, or he will die. He makes it to the witch’s house and completes the process. He is human again.
Cleaned up and sober, accepting of his mortality, Brigham and his wife are reunited, and he has a very successful solo exhibition in Rome. They celebrate Brigham’s return to the world of men with a party in Brigham’s garden.
Edited by mhender668, 17 December 2012 - 10:46 AM.